Hi All,
Here's my offering for this weeks assignment with MP3
She's Got Style
See her walking down the boulevard
To fall in love would not be so hard
Hair black as a raven and her eyes so green
Looks like she walked out of somebody's dream
Every head turns as she passes by
All the young men try to catch her eye
The way she moves could make you lose control
Make a wise man want to sell his soul
She's got the look
She's got the hook
When she smiles
She's got the moves
She's got the groove
She's got style
Always dresses in the finest fashion
The kind of woman that can stir your passion
Every hair in place every fit just right
Don't you want to take her home tonight
(Solo)
She's got the look
She's got the hook
When she smiles
She's got the moves
She's got the groove
She's got style
(Solo)
See her walking down the boulavard
To fall in love would not be so hard
Hair black as a raven and her eyes so green
Looks like she walked out of somebody's dream
Every head turns as she passes by
All the young men try to catch her eye
The way she moves could make you lose control
Make a wise man want to sell his soul
She's got the look
She's got the hook
When she smiles
She's got the moves
She's got the groove
She's got style
She's got style...
John
Very slinky, John! Especially nice work in the phrasing of the choruses - made me think of Tom Waits. And the internal rhymes that pop up ("try" and "eye," "moves" and "lose" in the second stanza) help put a little pop in the delivery as well.
Very nice.
Looking forward to more.
Peace
A very 'stylish' lyric, John, just asking to be sung. If I were to be ultra-critical, I would say that, 'to fall in love would not be so hard' sounds a bit forced compared to the natural feel of the other lines.Otherwise, hard to fault.
Cheers, David.
Thanks
I didn't notice the internal rhymes until you mentioned them David so
they were purely unintentional. Interesting with the Tom Waits mention
That was not at all what I was going for but gave me some ideas for a
different arrangement to try.
Yes, the 'to fall in love would not be so hard' is a bit forced so
is rhyming boulevard and I didn't want to use "street" because
it just seemed too cliche.
John
rhyme suggestions for your rhyming pleasure: (from a book)
avant-garde
bodyguard
diehard
discard
regard
unmarred
vanguard
Hey Pearl
Thanks for the list I liked avant-garde so much I went with it.
See her walking down the boulevard
A little sassy a little avant-garde
I think that sounds less forced than the original line
and adds to that Tom Waits feel that David mentioned
John
hey. that's good! i agree. it's a little unexpected.
