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(@vic-lewis-vl)
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03/11/2007 9:38 pm  

Well I haven't written much lately, but I have to say, Mr Hodge, you couldn't have picked a much easier starter to ease me back in - this one took all of about three minutes to write!

Same Old Blues

I open my eyes in the morning expecting bad news,
Yes I open my eyes in the morning expecting bad news,
'Cause I wake up every morning with the same old blues.

I didn't sleep at all well, but then I never do,
No I didn't sleep at all well, but then I never do,
Sometimes I hardly sleep, but I wake up with the same old blues.

Loneliness and misery, seem to be my only dues,
Yeah, loneliness and misery, seem to be my only dues,
And I wake up every morning, with the same old blues.

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Probably done in the key of A, with a solo after the second verse - although Am, Dm and Em7 might work well for this one, I'm thinking slooooooow blues.....

:D :D :D

Vic

(Pssst - I cheated - it's 10.40pm Saturday Night here.....)

"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)


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 Celt
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03/11/2007 11:49 pm  

Vic

Very traditional !

As a matter of fact that title has been used at least
twice that I can think of but David did say traditional.

I think the minor chord progression may work better.
It has a darker feel.

John

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(@martin-6)
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04/11/2007 3:47 pm  

Looks like pretty good start to the year... but as usual I do have a couple of things to suggest:

-Line 6, "Sometimes I hardly sleep" - could be one too many repetitions of "sleep"? You could put something like "I toss and turn all night"... or anything really.

-Verse 3, "dues" seems like an unusual choice of word. Don't be a slave to your rhyme scheme! I checked on rhymezone.com and there are 167 terms which rhyme with blues...

Keep up the good work - and by the way, I hope your song isn't true!


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(@davidhodge)
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04/11/2007 9:18 pm  

I'm with Martin on the "dues" bit, but I'm (currently) at a loss for suggestions. So it's going to sit in what passes for my brain for a spell and I'll see what happens...

As to chord progression, well, feel free to make that your SCW assignment. Personally, I agree with John on the minor, but I'd probably go with E7 or E9 instead of Em7. I think that would give it more zing. Hey... maybe E7(#9) - the Purple Haze chord!

Peace


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(@smokindog)
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08/11/2007 4:15 pm  

Aside from a bit of tweaking, looks like a blues to me 8) I think the standard blue format is the perfect template for a song :lol:
Vic, try tuning your acoustic to open G and picking out something. that almost always gives me an Idea or two :idea:

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(@fraydoc)
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08/11/2007 4:22 pm  

Misery and depression...just about a perfect recipe for a slow blues song. I think 'dues' is OK - seem to remember hearing it in blues songs before, or am I imagining?


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(@smokindog)
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08/11/2007 4:31 pm  

Vic, check this guy out. I always listen(and watch) him play a few tunes when I need some Ideas.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PWk3sLGU_tU

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 pbee
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08/11/2007 5:05 pm  

Hi Vic,

Looks like a blues song to me mate, as for the dues verse; you could try something like this:

Loneliness and misery, wont ever cut me loose,
Yeah, loneliness and misery, wont ever cut me loose
And I wake up every morning, with the same old blues.
There is one thing (and it's probably just the way I'm thinking right now) but I kept on wanting to use the phrase “same old same old blues” each time.

Cheers
Paul

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(@smokindog)
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08/11/2007 6:09 pm  

Hey paul, I like that that line "“same old same old blues” 8)

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(@straycat)
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22/11/2007 5:49 pm  

late reply, i know. sorry. just wanted to let you know i like it. and "same old same old blues" sounds good in my ears;-)
got a blues stalking me, too.... and the mornings never quite shake off the night. and the night never quite shakes off the day. same old same old me with the same old same old blues. :?

cheers,
straycat.

"oh, eventually it will break your heart" - anders wendin


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(@john82)
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02/02/2008 9:44 pm  

I liked the first verse, oh yeah and the title.

the 2nd and 3rd verse could be better.
i won't make any suggestions myself because i think it's quite useless to make suggestions to anyone about their lyrics.
after all it is THEIRS. I wouldn't like it if someone would correct me on my lyrics. a plain "i liked it" or "i didn't like it" is good enough...

so i liked it, :)
Johnny from guitars101


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(@sabalo)
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05/02/2008 11:32 pm  

Vic, Been gone for a while but I come back and see the same good doers still doing good stuff. I like it. I have one I am going to add for the week 1 when I get time think you could do good with it.
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