Man I’ve had a busy time of it lately, so have’nt been around here for such a long time.
Most of my spare time lately has been in my home studio re-recording a collection of my songs that I will publish as a CD or iTunes.
Café Culture
Santa Monica
Still Blue
Castles in the sky
Road to Somewhere
Calorie Commandoes
Game Over
Long Time
Going Places
Watching Listening
Ballad of St Patrick
Plus I had to move house, and in the middle of that house sit another as well.
And to top it all off my internet isn’t connected yet so this is via my phone. Anyway I did find some time to write this.
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Secrets
© 2015 Copyright Paul Brady
Ive got my reasons to be with you tonight
I keep them secret, keep them in, and hold you tight
You don’t know, but that’s alright
What I know will keep me with you, tonight
You’ve got your reasons to be with me right now
And I can see that, don't need to know, the why or how
But I know, and it’s alright
The things you know will keep you with me tonight
Please don’t say anything
Just let the moment be
No need to fill the empty space
…………………….……just breathe
just breathe
You know these secrets these things we keep to ourselves
We can’t define them, they’re mysteries only felt
But you know, that it’s alright
The things we feel will keep us here tonight
original version
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Ive got my reasons to be with you tonight
I keep them secret, keep them in, I hold them tight
You don’t know, but that’s alright
What I know will keep me with you, tonight
You’ve got your reasons to be with me right now
And I don’t see that, I need to know, the why or how
But I know, and it’s alright
The things you know will keep you with me tonight
Please don’t say anything
Just let the moment be
No need to fill the empty space
…………………….……just breathe
just breathe
You know these secrets these things we keep to ourselves
We can’t define them, they’re mysteries only felt
But you know, that it’s alright
The things we feel will keep us here tonight
Hi Paul,
Yes, it definitely sounds like you've been busy :shock:
I like the overall feel of the song and the idea of two people together with different motivations for the moment.
Suggestions:
Ive got my reasons to be with you tonight - good
I keep them secret, keep them in, I hold them tight- how about , AND hold YOU tight
You don’t know, but that’s alright
What I know will keep me with you, tonight
You’ve got your reasons to be with me right now
And I don’t see that, I need to know, the why or how…Consider reworking this b/c with the pause where it is, you are actually saying the opposite than if the line was heard in one phrase…..
You sing it like this:
And I don’t see that.
I need to know, the why or how…
Please don’t say anything
Just let the moment be
No need to fill the empty space
…………………….……just breathe
just breathe
You know these secrets these things we keep to ourselves
We can’t define them, they’re mysteries only felt
But you know, that it’s alright….BUT KNOWING THAT IT’S ALRIGHT
The things we feel will keep us here tonight..how about OUR REASONS/SECRETS WILL KEEP US HERE TONIGHT/WILL GET US THROUGH THE NIGHT
Thanks for sharing :D
James
Hi James thanks for the comments,
"AND hold YOU tight"
absolutely, I like that a lot (why didnt I think of that :o ).
Im going to stay with the
"The things we feel will keep us here tonight"
because for me its the transition from logic to emotion which is the real secret.
cheers
Paul